Treatment 1 ~ Final

Tag line

Pitch: 'Woman' is 19-20 years old. She is romantically involved with 2 men at the same time without them knowing. She uses them like a puppeteer, and from doing so she gains attention and feels good about herself. However what she doesn't realise is her lies are tampering with the red strings of fate she has made with the men, and how easily they can break.

Story:
We begin with a woman in a black room, all that can be seen is the red strings tied to her hands and fingers, which lead behind her and end attached to two men.The ties that shes made to them through romance.
Switch to a scene of a bedroom, we have a series of close ups, the 'Woman' is applying her red lipstick, make-up, snapshots of her features and hands while getting ready and primping herself. All the while we have our narrator introducing her character.
Around her vanity table we see various pictures of her with various men, past lovers and boyfriends. Red flowers sit in a vase on the table. She walks over to her wardrobe, and opens the door. As it closes we see her in a changed outfit. In the reflection she smooths her hair and giggles, looks upward as she thinks of her two lovers.
We see a montage of her and two men, being intimate, touching hands, lightly kissing her neck and cheeks and embracing her, we see both boyfriends have done this in the past as she recalls it.
We return to reality as we follow her downstairs and into the dining room, were we see a laid table for a meal, we watch as she adds the finishing touches, bringing in chinese to set down, a focus on her hand as she licks her fingers from the food and lights a candle.
'Ding dong' we hear the door bell ring, and just before she walks to the door, she notices and pulls off a fraying red tread from her top.
As she opens the door we cut to the black room, we see the 'Woman' facing one of the men, she looks at him and while laughing crooks her finger in front of her in a suggestive manner, thus pulling on the red string attached, which then pulls him forward. We cut back to the house scene as he steps through the door. As she leads him into the dining room the narration introduces him to us.
Then follows the date scene, sitting, eating the meal, light conversation, he takes her etc.
She then leans over to pick up a fortune cookie when the door bell rings again. Insisting the man goes to open the door, while 'Woman' sats at the table and cracks open the cookie.
Pulling out her fortune it reads '..........'
Cutting to the man opening the door we have narration all the while warns us to whats happening 'Now it gets interesting', and as the door opens were introduced to man number 2.
Standing at the door holding red roses with a grin on his face, it quickly falls as the two men look at each other with shocked expressions.
We cut back to the woman still sitting at the table, the two men walk through the door.
We fade into the abstract scene, the men are pulling on the red strings of fate, it starts to fray.
The strings break, and we see a pov of the 'Woman' , as she looks down to her hands, we see her look up to see the broken strings, and the men are gone.

Treatment 1 ~ Redraft

Tag line: 'The cruelest lies are often told in silence'. - 'Robert Louis Stevenson'

Pitch: 'Woman' is a 19-20 year old girl, she is romantically involved with 3 men at the same time without them knowing. She uses them like a puppeteer, and from doing so she gains attention and feels good about herself. However what she doesn't realise is her lies are tampering with the red strings of fate she has made with the men, and how easily they can break.

Story:

'Woman' is getting ready for a date, she applies lipstick, make-up, primping herself to perfection.We have a initial narration introducing her to the audience and the wrong she's doing. Around her vanity are photos and memories of her past lovers, boyfriends, some crossed out in the face, and her mother.Her phone rings and she talks into (see a montage of her talking to various people- passing on what she's doing, unashamed) while she gets ready. With a quick once over in the mirror she sets out and leaves her room.
Now on the sidewalk, we have an narration introduction to the man's character. (comedic introduction, from the woman's point of view) 'Woman is joined by one of her three men, we've seen how she repeats this date with previous men, and she takes her current man to the same location. The Cafe.

She is standing in control of the red strings she has created

Inside she settles down with her date, they converse lightly and laugh, an enjoyable meal follows.

Her man then advances to her, takes her hand, rubs his thumb on it in circles, a romantic gesture. She smiles back as we hear the narration 'now this is were its gets interesting'.
With the couple still holding hands in a seat by the window we see two men walk past and glance through. (introduction narration to there characters)
Upon seeing 'Woman' holding hands with another, they all confront her, and learn from each other what she's done.

They argue with her while she remains still and silent.

Then when they've all had enough they leave at the same time.

Treament 1 ~ Futher Ideas

We feel our story and characters was self motivated. The back story of the character is she's been raised by her single mother without the presence of her father, its left her with a need for attention and constant praise.

The main character the 'Woman' is seeing three men at once, we've considered a short scene at the beginning of our film to establish her as a character. Applying make-up ,and a basic morning routine, however we've brainstormed idea's of prop use to convey her personality, and the story, such as photos of her various boyfriends and single mother in the shot.


Plot points -

Establishing the 3 relationships.

They want commitment.

When she can not commit, they break up.

She's left alone.


The message was based off of my idea of White Lies, and how they return to haunt you .By cheating purely because she wanted attention, she couldn't commit and return the feelings of her men, this way she doomed herself to be alone.


Overall this how we visualise our film so far.


Beginning with shots of the Woman, close up, almost snap shots of her different features and movements, so we get a sense of her character and the world around her, without revealing all, easing the audience in. (considering using a phone to introduce soundtrack music.)


We then see an abstract scene, the woman standing in the centre of a room, red strings tied to her fingers leading to three male figures.


For the scene of introducing the three men, we imagine a spilt screen into thirds, similar to that in 500 Days OF Summer, this would be a great way to show the simultaneous relationships, with the Woman with a different man in each screen, doing to same actions. Presenting how she's using them, rather than each man being individual to her. This would also have a comfortable, story telling feel to the scene.

As the couples in the three screens reach there destination (a date setting - a cafe?) the screens merge into one, an overlaying image of all the men's hands opening a door.

We have action, reaction shots of each man sitting in the date setting, talking to the woman, with each transition back and forth, its a different boyfriend.

The men start to reach forward, asking for more commitment, using props such as Key's to suggest how they want to progress in the relationship, and she must back away.

She looks down to her hand, and we see the red string, tying them together, it has started to fray. When she looks again, its gone.

We return to the abstract scene, the woman is now tangled in the string, while the men are pulling it tighter.

We return to the date scene, using a circular pan around the cafe, each time it returns to the couple, she's arguing with a different man of the three

Once again we have simultaneous shots of the men leaving.

The woman is left alone.

She's left alone, with the strings broken around her.

We see a scene of the Woman going to the cafe, similar like with the men but now alone, the last shot of her by the window.

Treatment 2 ~ Draft

Based on the idea of 'A love or addiction that becomes a weakness'

A Mans best friend

This story revolves around the world of a man 'FRANK' and a dog 'LACY'. there is a strong bond between an slightly aged male and his very old dog as they have been together for longer then he can remember. LACY is everything to FRANK, thought to be inseperable. the dog is his only and most trusted, reliable and affectionate companion who looks after him in his frail condition as FRANK is blind. however, LACY soon falls ill and it's mind begins to deteriorate, an accident triggers the dogs condition into a huge turn of events. LACY becomes too ill and suffers with a mental conditon, she becomes weak and cannot lead FRANK to places. in it's state of health LACYS' personality dies and it becomes vicious and too violent and ill to live with and look after. the heartbreaking moment comes where FRANK has to let go of his one and only lifetime companion and part from it forever, as LACY is too old and frail too live, he has to leave his best friend to it's death.

Treatment 1 ~ Draft

From the idea of 'A powerful person who falls'.


A woman with the need for power over men, and how the red strings of love and fate connect her to the three men in her life, she begins as the puppeteer, 'stringing' the men along with no real love for the men she's with. So adsorbed in her vanity and need for attention she dates the three men at the same time.
However as she carries on the three men try to offer her there love and begin to demand commitment, she should becomes tangled in the own strings she once pulled.
Until she can hide her deception no longer and is caught red handed, and she loses all three men at once, and is left with facing her worst nightmare. Being alone.

The idea of the red strings is inspired by the 'red strings of fate'.
They're used to represent the connection between people, in this case the connection of the men to her, and how she uses those strings to control them, until they break.